When the sun kissed

When the sun kissed
the horizon goodbye.
It's finally time.

#Poetry #Haiku #DailyHaikuPrompt #Twighlight
@haiku_poetry

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Crepuscular/_animal

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wondrous_strange@lemmy.world · 1 pts · 1y (5 replies)

I like it but it's not an haiku

sunyata@mander.xyz · 1 pts · 1y (4 replies)

What makes you say that?

wondrous_strange@lemmy.world · 1 pts · 1y (3 replies)

Since if I'm not mistaken the first line does not have 5 syllables but 4

sunyata@mander.xyz · 1 pts · 1y (2 replies)

Ah I see your point. All I know about haikus is from this source.

After highlighting the most important characteristics of a haiku it states:

[...] form is not nearly as important as the other strategies I've covered. Form, in fact, is the most misunderstood aspect of haiku.

Since most english haikus I come across do not adhere to the strict format I assume it's true.

Initially I stuck to the pure 5/7/5 format and that was fun, but after some experimentation I appreciated the greater flexibility which allows for a better rhythm.

wondrous_strange@lemmy.world · 2 pts · 1y (1 reply)

I just want to say that all I know about haikus is the 7-5-7 rule. Thank you for enlightening me with your approach, it makes a lot more sense to me.

Regardless, I do really think it's a great and beautiful poem and I was pondering it most of the day

sunyata@mander.xyz · 1 pts · 1y

I'm glad to hear you like it that much :).

Whant to share your pondering? What does it mean to you?