[OC] Stand by the ocean, you'll hear a shell.

Stand by the ocean, you'll hear a shell;
Hold up a shell, hear the ocean as well.

Look at the sun and shadows grow;
Step in the shade and cool winds blow.

Stare at a fire, your face turns red;
Stare at the snow, feel cold instead.

Turn on a fan, the air feels light;
Turn off the lights, you'll see the night.

Climb up a mountain, earth looks small;
Lie on the ground, the sky looks tall.

Open an umbrella, rain stays out;
Close it in sunshine, the rays pour about.

Put on a watch, you notice the time;
Lose track of time, the hours will fly.

Read a good book, the world disappears;
Close it, and suddenly your room reappears.

Look through binoculars, far comes near;
Flip them around, and near disappears.

Shout in a canyon, it shouts your way;
Whisper in snow, and sound fades away.

Stand before a mirror, left becomes right;
Turn from the mirror, wrong becomes right.

Walk toward a rainbow, it moves away;
Walk from your shadow—it follows you all day.

Run beside the rain and drops seem slow;
Stand perfectly still and watch them go.

Ride with the wind and the breeze feels weak;
Turn back against it—it slaps your cheeks.

Look through clear glass and the world stays there;
Look through a window at night—you're the picture in the glare.

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7 Comments

OpenStars@discuss.online · 2 pts · 4d (6 replies)

Gorgeous!! 🥰

DavidFriedland@lemmy.world · 2 pts · 4d (5 replies)

Thank you! 🙏

OpenStars@discuss.online · 1 pts · 4d (4 replies)

Oh did you write this?! And the killing monsters one too - wowie zowie!! :-D

You might want to preface the title with "[OC]", to help indicate that fact. I don't really write poetry much myself these days, but perhaps others might offer different feedback if they know it is your own content rather than simply sharing nice thoughts - critiques, praise, suggestions for future work, I dunno what they'll do with it, but if you want people to know, that's how to accomplish that! :-)

I look forward to seeing more of your contributions in the future!!!!!!!! 😁 Especially now, as the Internet seems increasingly like it wants to crush our very souls 🥺, we take what pleasure we can, where we can. And reading your poems is pleasurable.😎

DavidFriedland@lemmy.world · 2 pts · 4d (3 replies)

Thank you kindly for the advice! I've added the [OC] tag.

I'm new to Lemmy, so receiving a "Wow" on my second post was awesome!

If you're looking forward to seeing more, I hope I won't disappoint. Most of my poems are intentionally positive. I don't just enjoy playing with the words—I hope each work carries feelings with it.

Thanks again for the welcome!

OpenStars@discuss.online · 2 pts · 3d (2 replies)

I am really glad that you are here.

It's okay to go dark as well, but indeed there is already so much darkness in the world already, that a breath of light is even more welcomed too.

There are several communities for such - like !lemmybewholesome@lemmy.world, and !upliftingnews@lemmy.world.

Personally I tend to avoid the communities located on the Lemmy.ml instance - you'll discover why over time but it's not always so obvious at first glance so I thought I'd offer you a heads-up, ofc you feel absolutely free to do you, but e.g. one of many reasons is that there is less engagement on those, as it gets increasingly walled off from the others (with good reason).

Your own instance - Lemmy.world - is a fine one, if a bit overcrowded. One day, maybe a year from now, you may want to migrate to another instance (or even start up one of your own?) so as to help spread out so that one server machine does not hold half the people on the entire federated network of instances, but for now you won't even know what you want to look for. And anyway Lemmy.world holds 90% of the most highly-active communities on it, so it's truly a great one to start with.

Enjoy! Learn! See! Do! And... feel welcomed 🥰.

DavidFriedland@lemmy.world · 2 pts · 3d (1 reply)

I'm glad to be here and maybe more so with the reception you've provided.

Sounds like I could definitely do without the .ml instance.

I looked at the wholesome and the uplifting Lemmy communities, thanks for those!

I'd love to start up one of my own! Dreaming about an 8 gig raspberry pi 5 with a nice external hard drive. One day.

I know you said it was okay to go dark. Next post I make is about as dark as I get.

It's called "When nothing else has worked" and it's a response to someone who left a short (suicide) note on a pole in a parking lot.

Spoiler: no tissues required.

OpenStars@discuss.online · 2 pts · 3d

Well then I look forward to... oh, it's here! Okay I'll go read it then.:-)

But for now, I will say that I am glad that you are enjoying your time here.:-)